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You’ve learned to build authentic voices, craft layered subtext, and edit for impact. We are now combining those skills for scene development. A scene is a performance, and dialogue can set the pace, control the rhythm, and guide the audience through an emotional arc.

The Rhythmic Pulse of Dialogue

You have complete control over your dialogue. You can quicken the pulse of a scene or slow it down to a solemn pace by manipulating the length of your lines and character response time.

Pacing with Line Length:

• Short sentences and rapid exchanges work well for common arguments, sudden confrontations, and emotional blowouts. Conversely, long, flowing monologues, reflective lines, and introspective ideas can slow the pacing. Slowing the train of thought may allow the reader to appreciate the emotional weight of dialogue.

Rhythm of the Response:

• Preemptively format the flow of conversation. Will characters interrupt each other, will there be long drawn-out pauses, or will people respond with body language alone? These details create character dynamics and reveal who has the charismatic edge or sits at the top of the hierarchy. A character who talks over another and interrupts may be rude or aggressive. However, based on earlier characterization, the moment may be a profound growth as someone finds their power. 

The Unbreakable Dance: Dialogue, Action, and Setting

Dialogue does not exist in a vacuum; its context—who talks, when and where they speak, and why they communicate—links directly to it. By combining these facets of communication, you can create dynamic moments within scenes. 

Integrating Action Beats:

• Characters should not just talk; they should do. A character can be gently arranging flowers as they deliver news of death. Someone may be rubbing a scar as they reminisce about another character. They might tremble while pretending to threaten someone as part of a ruse. The action beat of body language provides an anchor, contradiction, or insinuation to the spoken word. It is through this interaction, along with character context, that subtext shines.

• Example

“So, did HR tell you who did it?” Jane asked, her voice smooth. “I mean, they’ve gone through every computer in the place. What’s next, phones?” She joked, reaching for her coffee cup with a shaking hand.

Mary sat with her knees buckled and a finger twirling her hair. “They haven’t figured it out, but they’re still looking.” She looked down and chewed on the corner of her lip. “I just don’t get why someone would do that to me. But you’re right, it’s not that big of a deal.”

Jane blew cold relief into her steaming coffee and swirled it around. “Maybe you should tell HR to leave it alone. They’re turning you into a spectacle. It’s just one false review.” Her eyes darted to Mary, questioning if her suggestion would take root.

• Jane’s “calm voice” and “joking” demeanor immediately contradict her shaking hands, revealing inner turmoil. She feels a sense of relief after learning that HR has not identified the culprit, suggesting that she either knows who it is or may even be the perpetrator herself. Jane positions herself as an ally, but alluding to the idea that solving the mystery would damage Mary’s reputation makes Jane calculating. 
• Mary has a defeated posture and is self-soothing throughout the interaction. She lowers her head as if speaking to herself. She may be mentally detached from the setting. She is going through an emotional struggle connected to the reality that someone on her team is plotting her downfall. 

Dialogue and Environment

The setting is a character in its own right (make sure to subscribe, as setting and environment building will be coming in the following few blog posts).

Setting as a Modifier:

• A setting can create status conditions for your characters. If a character is walking through a dark forest they have never ventured through, they may have heightened anxiety. That would alter their thoughts, internal state, and willingness to discuss sensitive topics.

Setting as an Obstacle:

• The physical environment can also dictate how characters communicate. A character may not feel comfortable having a deeply intimate conversation at a public fast-food chain table. The setting can also be loud, which may compel characters to shout, or overcrowded, requiring them to whisper. The setting can even be hostile, forcing characters to solve a problem and escape.

Dynamic Combination:

• Consider a scene where a woman is on a train that has just started rolling down the tracks. A male character chases after it, trying to proclaim his love before it picks up speed. He may have to choose his words concisely yet quickly. Alternatively, two characters who want to get away may be forced into a confined space. 

The Scene’s Emotional Arc

Scenes begin and conclude at varying emotional levels, with transitional moments in between. A memorable scene has a clear emotional arc. They may start at a neutral or low-stakes point, build to a climax, and then resolve in a new emotional state. Dialogue is a tool that facilitates this journey.

Identify the Emotional Journey:

Ask yourself, what emotions color the initial actions of the scene, and how do those feelings evolve at the end? 

For example, a character, filled with aggression, may enter a conversation ready to argue. The character finds themself silenced and forced to listen to a calm, emotionally open, even apologetic monologue. The scene could end with a calm interaction that leaves the main character confused and questioning. 

Build Tension with Dialogue:

• At times, starting a scene with action may be advantageous. However, dialogue is often the driving force of scenes where characters interact. When the dialogue begins, use the ideas on rhythm and pacing we discussed earlier to build the scene. Then introduce a point of conflict where one character may lie or become subtly defensive. (Consider reading the sub header titled “The Subtext of Evasion and Deflection: The Art of Not Saying,” for a clearer understanding.) Use the principles of weaponized words discussed in to further the dialogue.

Climax and Resolution Through Dialogue:

• Some of the most impactful moments in a story are a single spoken line. A tight, well-crafted line can be a revelation, a confession, and a turning point all in one.
  • Think of the simple yet jaw-dropping line from Star Wars: Darth Vader’s “I am your father.” This line impacted Luke Skywalker’s psyche, corrected the lie that Luke’s father was dead, and altered the story of a man fighting an evil empire into a son questioning his father’s downfall.

Advanced Exercises

Here are a few exercises to help you master the art of conducting your scenes with dialogue.

1: The Emotional Spectrum:

Write the same scene three times, each with a different emotional intensity. The first should be a neutral, baseline scene. The second should be high intensity (aggression, elation, or terror). The third should be low intensity (annoyance, fear, or confusion). Focus on how varying sentence structure and word choice can shift the emotional feeling of the scene.

2: The Emotional Pivot:

Take a scene from your writing where a character is experiencing a specific emotion. Now, rewrite the scene using the opposite feeling. Joy becomes sorrow, anxiety turns into calmness, and anger shifts into compassion. Study how this alteration affects their dialogue, sentence rhythm, and the scene’s overall pacing.

3: The Emotional Map:

Choose a climactic scene from your work. Carefully mark the emotional beats of each moment. When finished, plot those emotions in order on a piece of paper. At what points does the tension begin to build? When does it peak? What specific lines of dialogue shift dynamics? Is the emotional arc worthy of the moment? Are the emotions downplayed? Are they melodramatic for the situation?

Conclusion:

As you practice these techniques, you’ll discover that you are not just writing lines; you’re giving life to a scene. Each word, pause, and action beat is a note in your story’s symphony of emotional experience. By mastering these subtle arcs, you move from writing conversations to creating moments that resonate with your audience. Additionally, if you try the exercises listed above, return and share your insights on what you learned. How has focusing on emotional intensity, pivots, and arcs changed your scenes? 

To further assist you in applying these skills, remember that tools exist. The organizational power of Scrivener can help you map out emotional arcs and track key dialogue beats as you study your scenes. Here is my affiliate link: (https://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener-affiliate.html?fpr=polyprose)

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